Instructions:

  The following sentences were written by students in my 11th grade classes and need to be corrected.  The errors in these sentences are regularly occurring in most of my students writing.   
     
   

I don't have that many goals in life.  I know that as a a young adult you should have allot of goals in life and we should strive for the best.  Like I said I really don't have that many goals but I do have some I think everyone should at least have some.  My first goal is to graduate from high school.  The second goal I have is to buy myself a car.  Last goal that I have would go to college and to mayor in business to become a Real Estate Agent.

 
     

Father Paul thumbs through a “glossy missionary” magazine(49). This magazine shows people that have lepers and pagans diseases. I think this magazine is important because it shows people that are in need of help and how he can’t do anything to help them, he thinks he can be a help to Leon.

     
   

Why does Louise wait so long to ask Leon about the holy water? What is she feeling?

* She asked later because she was thinking about things that she didn’t know what to do. She was probably feeling sad that he had passed away.

 

     
   

Teofilo’s family reacts very calm and collected when they find out about his passing away. “ It was noontime now because the church bells rang the Angelus. They ate beans with hot bread, and nobody said anything until after Teresa poured the coffee” (Silko 48). They are very quiet, and they get everything ready but everyone seems to stay to their selves.

 

   
   

My third and long term goal would be to go to school to become a five star chef and own my own restaurant and become a distinguished culinary artist I want to do this because my father was more of a 3 star chef in Chicago and I want to surpass him and make him proud

 
   
   

Cars and gas our cars can get us from point a to point b everyday of the week in a fast way but, gas and oil prices are expensive, cars also pollute the atmosphere which is very bad

 
   
   

Coronado's expedition was in search of baried treasure and gold his men were starving they were fighting back the Indians. Which the zoonys had no gold because they were killing more and more to flee.  He sent expeditions to the country side.  But once again found no gold, went in search on another village but once again no gold and the same as any other villages.  Three years of searching and found nothing.  He is very greedy and he wouldn't stop searching for the gold, but then he finally gave up.

 
   
   

They were able to ride horses they were fighting on horses backs the horses can spread disease.

 
         

Adam and eve didn't listen to god so they had to suffer the consequences, when the British came Indians were turned into slaves.

         
   

To find gold.  The leader of the Native people 

 
         
   

1538 entered Mexico and lost all because they encounter European Soldiers.

 
         
   

Some of the ideas and images that were surprising or striking to me were the pueblos and big and massive they were.